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    Am I Losing Friends? +Maniacal=Maniac+'s Avatar
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    Quote Originally Posted by bonodo
    heres the best one i could do;


    Blah, blah, blah
    (ba bedoobiibooda)

    cant think of no more

    Best Song ever.

    Here's Something I've Been Working On.

    Broken Promises

    ---Ver 1---
    There are so many things
    that you've said that we'd do.
    But all I've heard
    is a load of crap from you.
    Promises you've never kept,
    as if everything is a lie.
    Promises you've never kept,
    everything has gone awry.


    ---Chor---
    Bro-ken promises is all that come on by.
    So-o many lies, all my tears have run dry.
    Someti-mes I get the feeling,
    that you don't care 'bout me.
    I fee-l like life isn't all
    what its hyped up to be.


    ---Ver 2---
    I'm kill-ing all of the words you've said.
    Just to prove that they're not true.
    Now-a-days it seems that
    everything's about you.
    Ju-st Some-times
    I want you to go away.
    When I se-e you in the morning,
    I fall back asleep throughout the day.


    ---Chor---
    Bro-ken promises is all that come on by.
    So-o many lies, all my tears have run dry.
    Someti-mes I get the feeling,
    that you don't care 'bout me.
    I fee-l like life isn't all
    what its hyped up to be.




    That's All I Got So Far... Whaddya Think?
    Last edited by +Maniacal=Maniac+; 05-22-2007 at 06:06 PM.

    Meh


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    I have about 300 or so written songs, mostly about bad relationships, but I also have a lot of songs talking about violence or sex in a messed up world, war, government, armageddon, suicide, mainstream hating, etc. Maybe I'll post a few of my better songs later.

    I just wrote this today. This song isn't a true story, but it could easily relate to someone. Kind of a long one.

    "Off Kilter"

    (Verse 1)
    Can you see him down and a little off kilter?
    I wonder what he's dreaming through that filter
    Things that have messages that are subliminal
    And the acts of violence which are criminal
    For a life of a normal Homo-sapien;
    Have you seen what a situation you've put me in?
    Are you off to drown your sorrows in a slow pond
    Or teeter above a highway you tip-toe on?
    I'm here to announce that you're just ridiculous
    For being vicious and simply meticulous
    On a thorough plan to root your own existence;
    Can't you tell I'm on behalf of the resistance;
    Unwillingly, you don't seem to grasp the concept
    With your uppers, downers, and knives as sole objects;
    I've examined them on your hope chest, so what's next-
    A six-foot gouge in the Earth where you'll likely rest.

    (Chorus)
    For all the stoners and users you're committed to
    And all the stuff that you puff you're so addicted to;
    To all my friendly advice you're so conflicted to
    A burial of grievance is what's predicted to.

    (Verse 2)
    Can you see him out and a little off kilter?
    I wonder what he believes through that filter;
    I once came with you to a bar that you ransacked;
    I twice went with you to a car that you hijacked;
    Next, you had to drown yourself in gin and spiced rum;
    Then the big hit came; you didn't use a condom;
    You succumbed to a one-night stand; now she's pregnant;
    You're still to young to even care for an infant;
    You declare that you can do nothing about it,
    But I'll tell you that you can do something about it;
    You can either self-destruct like a kamikaze
    Or stand up and protect your land like a Nazi;
    Creating a plan should be the priority
    And leaving your influenced drugs the majority;
    You're swallowing in this shrinking hole of denial
    But obviously I can't help you reconcile.

    (Chorus)

    I'm your friend and cohort...
    So why can't you abort...
    All the snuff that you snort...
    Which makes your life distort...
    Because of you...

    I've gone nuts in my brain;
    Am I going insane?
    I've gone nuts in my veins;
    They are full of disdain. (x7)(first slow, then faster)

    (Verse 3)
    Then it occured; you were strung out in a phone booth
    Passed out as the perimedics wanted the truth;
    He seemed to mudder whispers with bad pronouncing
    As he laid on the stretcher, needing counseling;
    In a daze, I followed behind the ambulence-
    The longest trip I've ever took in Los Angeles;
    Outside the thick glass window, I saw my only
    True friend flatline; now he's above the world and free...

    (Chorus)(x2)
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    Quote Originally Posted by +Maniacal=Maniac+
    Best Song ever.

    Here's Something I've Been Working On.

    Broken Promises

    ---Ver 1---
    There are so many things
    that you've said that we'd do.
    But all I've heard
    is a load of crap from you.
    Promises you've never kept,
    as if everything is a lie.
    Promises you've never kept,
    everything has gone awry.


    ---Chor---
    Bro-ken promises is all that come on by.
    So-o many lies, all my tears have run dry.
    Someti-mes I get the feeling,
    that you don't care 'bout me.
    I fee-l like life isn't all
    what its hyped up to be.


    ---Ver 2---
    I'm kill-ing all of the words you've said.
    Just to prove that they're not true.
    Now-a-days it seems that
    everything's about you.
    Ju-st Some-times
    I want you to go away.
    When I se-e you in the morning,
    I fall back asleep throughout the day.


    ---Chor---
    Bro-ken promises is all that come on by.
    So-o many lies, all my tears have run dry.
    Someti-mes I get the feeling,
    that you don't care 'bout me.
    I fee-l like life isn't all
    what its hyped up to be.




    That's All I Got So Far... Whaddya Think?
    I like!

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    Quote Originally Posted by Hochiminh
    I like!
    Thanks!!!

    It Only Took About A Half Hour!

    Meh


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    Quote Originally Posted by +Maniacal=Maniac+
    Thanks!!!

    It Only Took About A Half Hour!
    In that short of time is quite a feat.

    For me, writing songs take maybe 20 minutes-3 hours! As long as you practice, have good writing skills, have mostly complete sentences, and your ideas don't stray heavily from the subject of the song, you can accomplish a lot.

    It's okay that I rep you.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Hochiminh
    In that short of time is quite a feat.

    For me, writing songs take maybe 20 minutes-3 hours! As long as you practice, have good writing skills, have mostly complete sentences, and your ideas don't stray heavily from the subject of the song, you can accomplish a lot.

    It's okay that I rep you.

    I Repped You Too! ^_^

    To Tell You The Truth, That's My First Attempt At Writing Lyrics.

    Meh


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    Quote Originally Posted by +Maniacal=Maniac+
    Best Song ever.

    Here's Something I've Been Working On.

    Broken Promises

    ---Ver 1---
    There are so many things
    that you've said that we'd do.
    But all I've heard
    is a load of crap from you.
    Promises you've never kept,
    as if everything is a lie.
    Promises you've never kept,
    everything has gone awry.


    ---Chor---
    Bro-ken promises is all that come on by.
    So-o many lies, all my tears have run dry.
    Someti-mes I get the feeling,
    that you don't care 'bout me.
    I fee-l like life isn't all
    what its hyped up to be.


    ---Ver 2---
    I'm kill-ing all of the words you've said.
    Just to prove that they're not true.
    Now-a-days it seems that
    everything's about you.
    Ju-st Some-times
    I want you to go away.
    When I se-e you in the morning,
    I fall back asleep throughout the day.


    ---Chor---
    Bro-ken promises is all that come on by.
    So-o many lies, all my tears have run dry.
    Someti-mes I get the feeling,
    that you don't care 'bout me.
    I fee-l like life isn't all
    what its hyped up to be.




    That's All I Got So Far... Whaddya Think?

    very nice very nice. Only a half hour you say? Golly Mr. Your crazy! Have some rep for your hard work.

    EDIT: after reading all of Grievers songs they reminded me of CC's songs like this one:

    explicit content in spoiler...
    Spoiler Alert!
    Last edited by ilikecookies; 05-27-2007 at 08:26 PM.

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    Quote Originally Posted by ilikecookies
    very nice very nice. Only a half hour you say? Golly Mr. Your crazy! Have some rep for your hard work.

    Thanks! I Have Fun When i Do It... Sooner Or Later I'll Put Up A Full Version...

    FYI:
    That Song Is A Bit To Explicit To be Posted On Here... Put It In Spoiler Tags And Above It Put "EXPLICIT CONTENT BELOW"

    Meh


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    Lol... right the whole there are children on this site thing. Thanks for the reminder.

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    Maniacal's first attempt? 30 minutes is pretty darn good!

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