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    Poem Help

    Hey,

    I need help on making two poems, a 21 line poem about anything you want, and a 31 line poem about rememberence. I don't really know what I should do for the 21 line poem, for the 31 line poem, I need tips, here is what I've written so far, which is 22 lines, 9 more:

    Ethan

    Remembrance Day Poem

    All the helicopters flying by,
    Watching all the people die,

    Every gun will be shot,
    People dying a whole lot,

    Reinforcements will not come,
    Because their lives are already done,

    Assassinations in every corner,
    People shrieking mourns of horror!

    The cannons firing in the air!
    So much pain that no one can bare!

    So much blood flowing down the river,
    It gives everyone a shiver.

    People washed up on the ground,
    They mustíve drowned.

    The animals falling to the Earth,
    Even the ones that just had birth,

    Boats drowning and fish floating,
    The other ships will all be gloating,

    Canít even manage to do a funeral,
    Or else, they will fall.

    And finally, they drop the bomb.
    Now everyone is all calm.

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    Dayum, thats actually pretty nice so far. Good job.

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    Another Anti War poem, it reminds me of the song "Intervention" by Arcade Fire. It's one of my favorite songs, there are so many references to anti Bush, it's very smart.http://youtube.com/watch?v=ZO7ZWfvCjBE
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    I like the Ending a lot not fond of the line dying a whole lot though. Good though, even though i disagree a bit with the meaning. How about when the bullets disappear, they'll wish they were never here. Meaning when the soldiers leave america wishes that they were never in the war.

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    Can I ask how old you are or like.. what year you're in to do this?

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    That does sound very nice. Some lines seem out of place, but overall, it is a great piece of work. Nicely done.

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    worth remembering. - Bruce Lee


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