An Unfinished Poem

kitkat_bar

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Dec 29, 2006
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This is a poem I wrote about how I have been feeling the past few days. It is unfinished and untitled:

Torment. Agony’s ugly alter identity.
It would seem that one could not exist without the other.
One may also consider that suffering may perhaps appear
to prevail most complimentary beside them.
Those who do are fools and know no such meaning of the word.
To suffer is to grasp in ones hands no more than
the mere appendage of torment.
Then what of suffering if it not torment?
Is it reasonable to assume that suffering can be expressed
as to what one can withstand?
If it be so, one’s suffering can only be described
as the point prior to the mind renouncing it’s own limitations.
Suffering is merely the caged chamber that environs me.
Each bar, utterly indistinguishable from the next,
assessing me, scrutinizing me, enticing me with
forged autonomy and embodying the distinctiveness
of one who can but only underline that which torments.
The torment can only convey itself as the keys to my cell
which have been positioned just out of reach of my grasp.
I can but only gaze at them, basking in the knowledge of the
splendor they represent.
If only some passing soul would but glimpse in my direction,
bear compassion, and by doing so, would tenderly
raise these keys from its place of rest, and
surrender them beside this fortress of imparity.
 
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A RAND0M TAC0 said:
whats been going on,

the poems excellent btw


Why thank you. Ugh....I wouldn't even know where to start on that one. It's just something I have to fix on my own or nothing will ever happen.
 
kitkat_bar said:
Why thank you. Ugh....I wouldn't even know where to start on that one. It's just something I have to fix on my own or nothing will ever happen.

yeah, ive been going through some total BS for the past year, but its out of my control :sad:
 
Does this help ?


I will deposit - He will withdraw

Poetry is but perfection
A mathematical amount
Life is but a reflection
Of the grace in your Account

With surrender you will realise
that God is all around
then you'll start to make deposits
in the bank that you have found

you just rely on your spirit
and forget to use your mind
you help your brother constantly
with no judgement of any kind

perception rises constantly
when you look on life like this
you fall in love with spirit
be sure the mind you will not miss

your brother must be helped
to see his simple sinless beauty
not only will you enjoy it
but you'll realise its your duty

at first it feels confusing
but you'll soon learn not to fear it
for I am not a body God
I tell you im a spirit

poetry and life
different words but mean the same
your world is an illusion
its your life but its a game

to the unlearned these words are harsh
they may seem to be quite mean
wake up my sleeping brother
you've been sucked in by a dream

so prayer service and practice
is what you use to bring down the fire
from our holy lord the father
who will burn up your desire

so tell me god what is the cure
for the consequences that we reap
he looked on me with omnipresence
said son its simply what you EAT

FOOD FOR THOUGHT
 
OH MY GOD!!!! GOD'S ON THE FORUMS!!!!!! I MEAN ----- OH MY YOU!! YOU'RE ON THE FORUMS!!!!! What's the meaning of life?


Kitkat (odd name...one of my cats has that name :tard:), that poem is great. I'm not really poetic, but I can feel your pain. Almost. No one can truly feel ones pain but that one. Wait, was that poetic? I don't know. I don't know you, but I truly feel sorry for you. My life has been a total Hell hole at some point or another. I hope you make it through. Until then, here's a poem I wrote just now:

Gonna find my baby, gonna hold her tight
gonna grab some afternoon delight.
My motto's always been; when it's right, it's right.
Why wait until the middle of a cold dark night.
When everything's a little clearer in the light of day.
And you know the night is always gonna be there any way.
 
ThatGuy127 said:
Until then, here's a poem I wrote just now:

Gonna find my baby, gonna hold her tight
gonna grab some afternoon delight.
My motto's always been; when it's right, it's right.
Why wait until the middle of a cold dark night.
When everything's a little clearer in the light of day.
And you know the night is always gonna be there any way.
Wow, you wrote something, went back in time, gave it to Jon Carrol, then came back to the present and plagiarized it from him. Bloody brilliant.
 
I know...Probably took longer to think of the poem than it did to build the time machine. Too bad when that song was produced it destroyed my time machine.
 
OH MY GOD!!!! GOD'S ON THE FORUMS!!!!!! I MEAN ----- OH MY YOU!! YOU'RE ON THE FORUMS!!!!! What's the meaning of life?

Ill get back to you :ihih:

Think about it :yesnod:
 
GOD said:
Ill get back to you :ihih:

Think about it :yesnod:

He...------ *shudder*

I really do mean it though...That's deep, Kitkat.
(Gimme a break, Giiiiiiimme a break, Break me off a piece of that KIT-KAT BAR!)
 
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I was gonna say something...but then I stopped and shuddered.... *shudder*
 
great poems guys...I have a bunch of poems but they're in Spanish and wouldn't quite rhyme if I translated them in English..
 
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