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An Unfinished Poem

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  1. kitkat_bar

    kitkat_bar I am a girl, deal w/ it.

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    This is a poem I wrote about how I have been feeling the past few days. It is unfinished and untitled:

    Torment. Agony’s ugly alter identity.
    It would seem that one could not exist without the other.
    One may also consider that suffering may perhaps appear
    to prevail most complimentary beside them.
    Those who do are fools and know no such meaning of the word.
    To suffer is to grasp in ones hands no more than
    the mere appendage of torment.
    Then what of suffering if it not torment?
    Is it reasonable to assume that suffering can be expressed
    as to what one can withstand?
    If it be so, one’s suffering can only be described
    as the point prior to the mind renouncing it’s own limitations.
    Suffering is merely the caged chamber that environs me.
    Each bar, utterly indistinguishable from the next,
    assessing me, scrutinizing me, enticing me with
    forged autonomy and embodying the distinctiveness
    of one who can but only underline that which torments.
    The torment can only convey itself as the keys to my cell
    which have been positioned just out of reach of my grasp.
    I can but only gaze at them, basking in the knowledge of the
    splendor they represent.
    If only some passing soul would but glimpse in my direction,
    bear compassion, and by doing so, would tenderly
    raise these keys from its place of rest, and
    surrender them beside this fortress of imparity.
     
  2. A RAND0M TAC0

    A RAND0M TAC0 Like A Stone

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    whats been going on,

    the poems excellent btw
     
  3. kiraownsurmom

    kiraownsurmom Man Points: Over 9000

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    dudette,thats deep...im serious
     
  4. kitkat_bar

    kitkat_bar I am a girl, deal w/ it.

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    Why thank you. Ugh....I wouldn't even know where to start on that one. It's just something I have to fix on my own or nothing will ever happen.
     
  5. A RAND0M TAC0

    A RAND0M TAC0 Like A Stone

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    yeah, ive been going through some total BS for the past year, but its out of my control :sad:
     
  6. GOD

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    Does this help ?


    I will deposit - He will withdraw

    Poetry is but perfection
    A mathematical amount
    Life is but a reflection
    Of the grace in your Account

    With surrender you will realise
    that God is all around
    then you'll start to make deposits
    in the bank that you have found

    you just rely on your spirit
    and forget to use your mind
    you help your brother constantly
    with no judgement of any kind

    perception rises constantly
    when you look on life like this
    you fall in love with spirit
    be sure the mind you will not miss

    your brother must be helped
    to see his simple sinless beauty
    not only will you enjoy it
    but you'll realise its your duty

    at first it feels confusing
    but you'll soon learn not to fear it
    for I am not a body God
    I tell you im a spirit

    poetry and life
    different words but mean the same
    your world is an illusion
    its your life but its a game

    to the unlearned these words are harsh
    they may seem to be quite mean
    wake up my sleeping brother
    you've been sucked in by a dream

    so prayer service and practice
    is what you use to bring down the fire
    from our holy lord the father
    who will burn up your desire

    so tell me god what is the cure
    for the consequences that we reap
    he looked on me with omnipresence
    said son its simply what you EAT

    FOOD FOR THOUGHT
     
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    Cool Poem GOD :smilewinkgrin:
     
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    OH MY GOD!!!! GOD'S ON THE FORUMS!!!!!! I MEAN ----- OH MY YOU!! YOU'RE ON THE FORUMS!!!!! What's the meaning of life?


    Kitkat (odd name...one of my cats has that name :tard:), that poem is great. I'm not really poetic, but I can feel your pain. Almost. No one can truly feel ones pain but that one. Wait, was that poetic? I don't know. I don't know you, but I truly feel sorry for you. My life has been a total Hell hole at some point or another. I hope you make it through. Until then, here's a poem I wrote just now:

    Gonna find my baby, gonna hold her tight
    gonna grab some afternoon delight.
    My motto's always been; when it's right, it's right.
    Why wait until the middle of a cold dark night.
    When everything's a little clearer in the light of day.
    And you know the night is always gonna be there any way.
     
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    Wow, you wrote something, went back in time, gave it to Jon Carrol, then came back to the present and plagiarized it from him. Bloody brilliant.
     
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    I know...Probably took longer to think of the poem than it did to build the time machine. Too bad when that song was produced it destroyed my time machine.
     
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    Ill get back to you :ihih:

    Think about it :yesnod:
     
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    He...------ *shudder*

    I really do mean it though...That's deep, Kitkat.
    (Gimme a break, Giiiiiiimme a break, Break me off a piece of that KIT-KAT BAR!)
     
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    what does that mean ? :confused:
     
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    I was gonna say something...but then I stopped and shuddered.... *shudder*
     
  15. Axtlar

    Axtlar Del fuego he resurgido...

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    great poems guys...I have a bunch of poems but they're in Spanish and wouldn't quite rhyme if I translated them in English..
     
  16. kitkat_bar

    kitkat_bar I am a girl, deal w/ it.

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    It has anchorman written all over it.
     
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    Yup....well, I actually was listening to that song at the time.
     
  18. Axtlar

    Axtlar Del fuego he resurgido...

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    That's right, he wouldn't have known that song if it wasn't sung in the movie
     
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    Not true....One of my favorite songs, I probably heard it a year before Anchorman was out.
     
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    Axtlar Del fuego he resurgido...

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    Oh ok, forgive me then
     

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