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Discussion in 'The Lounge' started by GamerCon, Jul 9, 2007.

  1. GamerCon

    GamerCon WiiChat Member

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    I've been working on this for a while. Not really, its been off and on. I was hoping to get some feed back on it, its just the first page or two. Im cleaning it up so it makes more sense as thats one of the problems with it. Im wanting to turn it into a game, ive always wanted to story write for games, but would like to know how this is going first.

    Its not a fanfic, sorry. Anything that i could improve on or something, love to hear it. Even if it just sucks.

     
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  2. chach

    chach umm yaa.... anybody here?

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    what a waste of my time thanks...
     
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    it was decent i guess...rpg i'm guessing is what your aiming for?

    the only problem is the introduction to characters, they were all the same and didn't describe any of the characters...........

    and since your writing for a game, you should describe the setting in brackets or something
     
  4. GamerCon

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    I hate writing, its gonna be like, manga style. Its not the whole thing, theres about 13 pages but it has even less detail then that so, i have to go through it.

    I wasnt really describing the characters cause it was suppose to have been near the end of the book so all the characters have been established.

    I dont read books either so im not sure how i do most things. Any kind of writing tip would be helpful.

    Thanks MM, ill add brackets for the narrator.

    Thanks Chach, ill try to make the begining a little more interesting.
     

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