Major Tom said:Great story. Not a great game sequel though... It would be a better anime.. Nintendo will not ever make this a game. [to much kissing and gore...] They might make an anime though. This is just not their game style. Plus for a game he gets his ultimate weapon to soon.
Heres some constructive criticism
1. Why does he have the Ordon sword.... He should have the Masters sword still.
2. You should rewrite Zelda's speech. That speech has been done a million times....
3. Like I said before it's done more as an Anime or Movie than a game.
4. You writing is excellent but try not to use to many scenes from different movies and books.